Every year ordering custom essays becomes more popular among
students. Many potential clients consider using custom writing services because
it saves their time, helps them to concentrate on their favourite subjects and
offers more opportunities for personal development allowing active involvement
in interesting activities besides studies. One of our writers decided to
conduct research on different approaches to essay writing. He recorded the
story of his friend who shared with him his experience of writing an essay for
his English Literature class:
“…During my sophomore
year at high school, I was assigned to write an argumentative essay on any
topic. I showed the first draft of the essay to my teacher. He read it
carefully and then said, “This essay is not what I want.” I felt disappointed
and angry at the same time. What’s wrong with my essay? Why didn’t he explain?
I came home and
decided to read it again. The first thing that I noticed was the introduction
that didn’t catch the attention of the readers. My essay was about gender
inequalities and employment. I started with describing historical events
related to gender issues and illustrating some facts which did not explain the
topic of my essay. Therefore, I revised the introductory paragraph of the essay
providing striking statistics about the progression of gender inequalities for
certain job positions. The introduction became interesting to read because the
facts in the introductory part of my essay were taken from sources which were
difficult to access and not actively “advertised”. Because of the uniqueness of
the introduction readers were easily involved in the process of reading the
essay; their desire was driven by their curiosity in the further development of my
arguments.
However, my introduction was still not perfect. The next
element that I had to revise was my thesis statement. Thesis helps a reader to
focus on the main point that a writer is going to prove by his/her essay. It
may seem easy because before writing an essay you record your central idea
immediately and then collect information and build your writing process in
accordance with the main idea. Nevertheless, the thesis statement that you have
in your mind may not be persuasive in written form. It is essential to remember
that your thesis statement is not a summary of the essay that you were assigned
to write. On the contrary, it is your standpoint on the chosen topic.
Thus, it should include your own opinion, the opposite point
of view and the summary of supportive facts which will be presented further in
the essay. The question is how to fit all those elements into one sentence of
your thesis statement. It may take quite a long time. However, if you manage to
write a strong thesis statement, you’ll succeed in presenting the complex idea
of your essay using simple text. It does not mean using simple vocabulary; it
rather means developing more persuasive arguments and making your essay easier
to read. The thesis statement in my essay was: “According to sociological
research, in multinational companies’ women have fewer opportunities than men
to be hired for managerial positions.”
I thought it was a perfect
thesis statement; however, it was absolutely unacceptable. To begin with, the
thesis statement of my essay was biased because it did not reflect the point of
view of the opposite party. Besides, the main points which support the idea of
the essay was not summarized in the thesis statement. Thus, I revised the
thesis sentence and wrote the following:
“Even though some researchers believe that the new
perception of the role of women in modern society established equal
opportunities for men and women, psychological indicators and sociological
findings demonstrate that women have fewer opportunities to be hired for
managerial positions in multinational companies.”
At last
I finished my work on the thesis statement! The writing process went smoothly. I
already had the structure of the essay in my head. First, I recorded the first
sentences which explained the central idea of each paragraph in the main body
of the essay. Later I reorganized my notes which I took while reading useful
literature on my topic and supplied each paragraph with the evidence that
supported my arguments.
In the
conclusion, I summarized the key points and restated the thesis. I showed the
second draft to my teacher and his only comment was, “I’m glad that you learnt
how to write an essay.”…”
Probably
this story will remind you of your personal experience of learning how to write
essays. The story is interesting because this student discovered himself those
mistakes that he made while writing the first draft of his essay. His knowledge
came from practice. He was able to write a good essay but he would spend less
time on his improvement if he did research and used online guides on writing
essays.
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